The Official Writing Challenge
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This is intense,you have captured the feel and heartbreak that many children are forced to endure. It may not be a bright glimpse of life, but, many are living the reality of such a life. Great story, well written.
Oooh, very good! I love the victory dance of the "fairies." I just wanted to shout out to the kids--they're demons! Be careful!

One quick change: So Ryan and I danced...

Even with the fantasy element, this is a very realistic look into teenaged life. Good job.
Such a sad story that reflects the reality of way too many lives. Well done! :)
Very powerful. It certainly hits home with alot of things I've been thinking about lately. Well done.
You did a GREAT job of showing the actions and thoughts of these characters - very realistic! Your ending is especially good. Great writing!