The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/06
This has potential. With a little help with sentence structure and punctuation, you're on your way. And how true it is that sometimes God has to put an end to the "me" in our lives, so that the "He" can be exalted. Blessings.
I've also discovered that I was "all about me" in referance to ministry and family etc...God has been breaking me and it's both a painful and beautiful experaince. Your story portrayed that experience wonderfully. Next time try to get someone to proof read, the ...were a little too much. But keep working at it!
02/16/06
I agree, the me, me, me needed to break, so the He-He-He could shine through. I agree though a few too many
...,, here and there. A little bit of careful editing and you have a got it licked. Keep writing! God bless ya, littlelight
02/19/06
In the beginning you used the word "were" instead of "where" a few times; however, it was a great beginning...and keep up the good work. God Bless!