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By Josh Givens
11/06/13
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I'm sitting in a waiting room to see a doctor. What a horrible feeling. Knowing the next two, possibly three hours of my life will be spent here. This place is packed, I might be here all night. The lady to my right is coughing, and sneezing, and isn't very good at covering her mouth. To my right is another lady with her two children, who don't know how to be quiet, and my head feels awful. On the television there is a General Hospital re-run, and I know the game is on.

They say good things come to those who wait, but right here, right now, in this moment, that doesn't feel true at all. Even so, when I do get called back, the end result is just to get poked and prodded, something stuck in my ear or my mouth, maybe even get told I'm overweight.

Isn't this what life feels like sometimes? We are always waiting. Maybe we're waiting for our husband to be a little nicer, or our kids to learn to clean up after themselves. Maybe we're waiting for that job promotion, but we have no idea if any of these things are going to happen. It feels like they never will.

In Galatians 6:9 Jesus says: "And let us not grow weary of doing good, for in due season we will reap, if we do not give up." I want to be more like Jesus, and I take these things to heart.

So I sit back in my chair a little. I take a deep breath, and try to relax. I cherish that fact that, even though I may be sick at the moment, I'm pretty healthy, in body and in mind. I try to use a little patience. Wouldn't you know it, not long after that I hear...

Mr. Givens, the doctor will see you now...

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11/07/13

This was a raw and honest approach to the topic at hand, and it touched my heart in an unexplainable way. Thank you for your candid observations of life overall. I also liked how the "pigs might fly" topic was there in a subtle way.

Nicely done. Thanks!

God bless~

11/07/13

I could identify with the MC in the story. Life is all about waiting!

Larry Whittington

11/08/13

It sounds like life is happening. We all can have these times and places.

What I have to work at and tell myself that "I am where God wants me at this particular moment in time." "I am where I am for God's pleasure and his glory." Then I have to ask myself, "What am I doing so God will be glorified."

A proper attitude will cause time to seem to fly.

Life subjects are good things to write about because everyone goes through life.

Keep writing.

11/10/13

Very simply said, and wrote...we could all use a lesson in patience. God Bless, and keep writing.

11/10/13

This is a well written entry, short and sweet, but you gave a detailed account of your MC's thoughts and feelings. I felt his frustrations as he waited to be seen by the doctor. You included a worthy message in there too, and I like the way you wrapped it all up at the end. Great job. Well done.

Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom

11/10/13

This is a great message. Oh how we all can relate. I've often said that it seems we spend a good part of our lives wishing it away. I wish the doctor would be on time. I wish the red light would turn green. How sad to wish away this wonderful life that God has given us. Though I had a little trouble seeing the topic, I think your message is inspired by the Holy Spirit. Sometimes it's more important to write what God places on our heart. He uses us in ways we might never know. Yet I have no doubt that many will be blessed by your words.

If you haven't been to Jan's Writing Basics on the message boards, I'd highly recommend it for all levels of writers. Keep writing. God bless.

11/11/13

You do a very good job of capturing your MC's stream of thought. I always like that when I am reading, as it helps me to know and understand a character's choices. I hope you keep writing!

11/11/13

Nice job for your first entry!

My main suggestion would be to make sure you tell us something new. The easy "trap" to fall into with devotionals, especially, is just to restate what we already know. Try to come up with something unique, and then, rather that just using a real life example, try to use a story as an antidote, even if it's fictional. I hope that made sense.

There are some great reminders here. Waiting is hard! :) Keep writing.

Judith Gayle Smith-Owens Vitouswykegardinerclark

11/12/13

Excellent first Challenge article. Clear, concise and encouraging.

11/13/13

Good first entry, being in the medical field I know there is no better place to learn patience than in an ER waiting room:)