The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a powerful and thought provoking piece. I think you did a grand job of finding just the right scriptures to back up your article.

The only thing I might suggest would be to do more showing and less telling. It's a skill all writers work on throughout their entire life. Some think it can't be done in a devotion or nonfiction but it is possible and should help your reader connect more. For example this line is telling: he emphasises his love
Show me what that looks like. Perhaps he bounces back and forth on his toes or waves his hands as he speaks.

Your ending is amazing. It really grabbed my heart and my mind. I've never thought of it in the way you put it and your words show so clearly the difference between from and for. I also liked how you weaved the topic into this nicely and subtly but still packing quite a punch. You did a good job of explaining this in a way laymen can understand. Nicely done.
12/11/12
Wow- powerful and emotionally charged, especially the jolting ending. Thank you.
God bless~
12/13/12
Congrats! God bless~
01/03/13