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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Flowers (10/03/05)
He loves me, He loves me not...
This is how Satan strives for your thoughts.
Deceiving, deceiving, and we're always believing;
yet Satan- He loves us not.

He loves me, he loves me not...
Should we even question this perilous mot?
For I know the truth, I know the way; yet how be-it that I tend to sway; when the devil convinces to bethought.

He loves me, He loves me...
Oh blessed Lord Almighty, Who loves me without thought.
When I was a fading flower, you pursued my tiring wrought.
I was gone before the flesh, like prey before a Lion,
But your Love endureth forever, Oh wonderful God of Zion.

He loves me, he loves you...
he makes our lives anew.
He is the beginning and the end;
the one upon which I shall depend.
For as long as I am an inhabitant of this earth,
I shall forever give Him praise for my new spiritual birth.

He loves me, He loves us all...
Even as the flowers leisurely fade in the fall,
I feel his warmth unpoignantly fill up my soul;
Like a new born baby with his mother on a stroll,
I have found the Lord, My God, even amidst all of this worlds demeaning droll...

He loves us.
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Anita Neuman
10/11/05
What a great take on this topic! I think a little bit of polishing to tighten up the rythm of the poem would make this an EXCELLENT piece. I really like your theme, though - what a great message!
Alexandra Wilkin
10/11/05
I agree, the structure needs tightening up so that this piece can realise its full potential. Polish it up for an article submission - this is very good. God bless.
B Brenton
10/11/05
Interesting wordwork. Much better than mine of the same theme, I think. I'd like to see more of your poetry. It flows nicely.
Brandi Roberts
10/12/05
I really enjoyed the contrast here. The rhyming rhythm and scheme needs a little work, but it's a very good entry! Thanks for sharing!
Shelley Snyder
10/14/05
Hey, this was great! I enjoyed reading it!
Nina Phillips
10/17/05
How awesome a thought and how often we use the flowing scheme of plucking petels for our theme..but not so sweet nor complete as God's love conceived of thee. I think I may know the poet--and I also enjoyed the poem richly written. God bless ya!!
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