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TITLE: Siloam | Previous Challenge Entry
By Jody Day
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Day after day I counted footsteps; my heightened senses discerning between male and female, young and old, well or infirmed. I whispered a ‘thank-you’ to those who tossed coins into my basket.
Each day my mother brought me a small lunch and took me for a walk. One day last week she was brimming over with news of the man, Jesus of Nazareth, who was stirring up the Pharisees. He had barely escaped stoning that morning, the last day of the Feast of Tabernacles. He claimed to be older than Abraham. Some claim he is the Messiah.
“He stood up in the temple this morning and cried out, ’If anyone thirsts, let him come to Me and drink. He who believes in Me, as the Scripture has said, out of his heart will flow rivers of living water.’ My heart burned within me,“ my mother whispered. There was fear in her voice as she recounted to me how the Pharisees threatened excommunication from the synagogue to anyone who called this man the Christ.
“Do you believe in this man, my mother?” I asked her. She gripped my arm and lowered her voice. “Until dusk, my son,” she said and went on her way.
She said he spoke of living water. Living like the pool of Siloam, where hopes were dashed every time the water moved? I sat in my darkness, which was much deeper and more profound than my lack of sight.
A moment later my soul vibrated within me. Someone stood before me and the air tingled, like after lightening strikes the earth. I couldn’t move. A warm substance seemed to emanate from him and enveloped me in an embrace.
“Rabbi, who sinned, this man or his parents, that he was born blind?” Jesus answered, “Neither this man nor his parents sinned, but that the works of God should be revealed in him. As long as I am in the world, I am the light of the world.”
Light! That word, idea, emotion; that thing that I could not fathom or achieve stood before me? He knelt down beside me and actually spit on the ground. The next thing I knew he was smearing mud on my eyes. Then he said, “Now go, wash in the pool of Siloam.”
No one had ever helped me down the stairs into the pool before but now I would go no matter what. I half stumbled, half crawled until I felt the water with my hands. I did as He bade me and washed the mud from my eyes. I tell you I could see! I didn’t know what I was looking at, but I could see. Who was this man?
The Pharisees grilled both my parents and I about this miracle. They tried to convince us that Jesus was not from God, that he was a sinner.
“Whether he is a sinner or not, I don't know. One thing I do know. I was blind but now I see!" This angered them. They hurled insults at me and threw me out.
“If he were not from God, he could do nothing.” I repeated this to myself over and over. The statement angered the Pharisees, but it was bubbling up from my heart. Suddenly Jesus stood before me again. He spoke lovingly to me about who he is. “Lord, I believe.” I fell down and worshipped him.
Why am I here again at Siloam? My Master granted me my life-long desire to help my father and mother. But I come here to tell these poor and sick about the light of the world, my Jesus.
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You need to work on the mechanics of writing so that it is easier for the reader to read. Try a shorter paragraph in the beginning and add some white space between the paragraphs as well as starting a new paragraph when a new person starts talking.
You had some many vivid details and you brought out a lot of emotion in me. I found my heart pounding several times while reading this story.
You did a great job with the actual story telling. It just needs some polishing which is easily done. Great job.
Think about what the man thought when he could first see... How he reacted. I felt the reaction was a bit... "subdued." I was expecting more excitement!
I think you captured the man's feelings of inadequacy well, though. Very good!
Short and SO sweet....
I once was blind; NOW I SEE!