The Official Writing Challenge
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You know, I could actually hear Oma's voice.

Well done! You illustrated the topic very well.

"when she finished only a pile of yarn was left, puddled in her lap" so descriptive. I love it!
Very nice story! Lines between paragraphs would make it easier and smoother to read. But it's a very good story.
Very sweet story and I enjoyed the vivid descriptions. Good job!
01/28/08
Beautiful! I loved the patience of Oma!
Putting an extra space between paragraphs will help the reader.
Good descriptions and dialogue.
Great job...keep writing.
What a charming little piece! I liked the flavor of culture with the dialouge of Oma and especially the line where-she was better suited to soothe a fragile 8-year-old ego. For me, that perfectly captured her in one little moment. This would make a great children's story-great writing! ^_^
I enjoyed this tender story. Congratulations on your 3rd place win, and good luck in Intermediate!
02/01/08
You really know how to capture a character and make her so appealing. Such a tenderly beautiful story and relationship makes me want to read more. Congratulations on your win, too!