The Official Writing Challenge
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10/27/07
This was good.

Try to to more showing and less telling. Show us how they found each other instead of just telling us how they did. Show us how it was revealed that he needed to be baptized, rather than just telling us.

I loved the last line. It's one of my favorite hymns. (What am I saying? Almost ALL of them are favorites!)
10/30/07
When God sets his wheels in motion, no one can stop them. Great story!