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TITLE: To Do My Father's Bidding | Previous Challenge Entry
By Clyde Blakely
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"Lord, I’m frustrated."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"Out here in the middle of nowhere in a dead end job."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"Don’t get me wrong but what have I learned? Father, I love being a shepherd but sometimes I think all these years have been wasted. And these sheep have got to be the dumbest things on earth."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"It seems like I’m always saving one of them from something with my rod or catching them around the neck by my staff to keep them from wandering off or getting hurt. I even wonder if they appreciate it."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"Oh, I enjoy leading them to green pastures and beside the still waters."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"Oh, to lie down in these pastures looking around the countryside and up into the heavens. They really do declare Your glory. They bring me so close to You."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"I don’t want to sound like I’m ungrateful…but about the only excitement I’ve had here are when a bear and that lion attacked the flock. Thank you for protecting me and giving me the courage and strength to dispatch them with my bare hands."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"And I guess I do enjoy this sling my older brothers gave me when they went off to fight the Philistines."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"How many times have I slung it? A thousand; no, ten thousands times. I love to hear the hum of the rough, jagged stones as they fly, they even curve in flight sometimes."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh W-h-i-r-r-r-r-r-r-r-r
"But the smooth stones go so straight. As much practice I’ve had over the years I can pick a bee off a flower without damaging a petal. Target practicing on all these rocks along the steam is a lot of fun too."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Wham
"And when I’m angry I can bury one two inches into a tree."
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh Thump
"Oh Father, forgive me if I’ve sinned against You in my anger.
Try me to know if there’s any wicked ways in me. Then I’ll be able to teach others Your ways.
Heavenly Father, who would want a dead shot shepherd with a sling? Why have I been out here all these years? They seem wasted to me. Yes, I know that I am young and untested but You have given me courage and strength in the past. I know You will do it again if it’s Your will."
Swoosh, swoosh…
"David, oh David, I finally found you. Your Father wants you to take these things to your brothers and see how the battle is going. I’ll watch your sheep for you while you’re gone."
"Wonderful. I hear there’s a Philistine giant named Goliath who has four sons that fight with him. Maybe I’ll get to see them. Thank you, I’m off to do my Father’s bidding."
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Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh WHAM
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I was wondering what the "Swoosh. Swoosh. Swoosh. Wham" was for a while. :o)
I like your ending. :o)
I really like the message of the story!
I like the "swoosh, swoosh, shoosh, wham" deal every other sentence because it gives the feel of what life feels like sometimes .... the same thing over and over and over and over.
Even though life may often feel like that, the monotony may be what God is using to sharpen us and to prepare us for what's ahead.
I really like the message and the techniques you used.