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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Lifeguard (11/09/06)
Albert Jansa sat in his hut and looked through the open window. He picked up the binoculars that were next to him and started to scan the beach. It was early afternoon and the beach at the moment was quiet.
Only one tent was set up and one of the people under it stood up and waved at Albert. His heart sank when he realized it was Cindy Kern, her mother and their son Robert.
The worst day in Albert's life was two years ago when he pulled an unconscious Charles Kern up on the beach and tried to revive him before the paramedics arrived. Albert tried everything he could but he later died at the hospital.
As he noticed the Kern's going into the water to swim, he remembered that Robert, like his father, was not a very good swimmer. Guilt wracked Albert's heart as he could not forgive himself or feel that God forgave him for the death of Charles.
He brought up the binoculars with tears in his eyes to see Cindy and he mother waving their arms in the water and Robert nowhere to be seen.
Albert quietly said " oh no", quickly called 911 and then ran out the wooden front door of the lifeguard hut. He sprinted across the beach, dove into the water and swam the short distance to where the Kern's were.
" Help he's unconscious" Cindy screamed as Albert got to him and started paddling quickly toward shore. He pulled Richard onto the sand and then hesitated. Guilt came flooding into his mind.
" I can't" Albert said with tears in his eyes. " If something happens again, I won't be able to forgive myself".
Cindy and her mother swam to shore and stood next to Albert. " Albert, God forgives you and so do we".
" God help me" Albert said as he began to give Robert mouth to mouth.
After a while of mouth to mouth, Richard began to spit up water.
" Thank you God" Albert proclaimed as he looked toward the sky and hugged Cindy and her mother.
That day, Albert's heart and life changed because of what happened to the lifeguard at Forgiveness Beach.
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Jan Ackerson
11/16/06
Great title, and you did a good job with the irony of this situation.

This piece would be immensely better with a closer edit for spelling, punctuation, capitalization. If these areas are difficult for you, perhaps you could find a "challenge buddy" who'd be willing to work on mechanics?

Love your lifeguard character, he's an interesting person.
Donna Powers
11/19/06
A very good story. You kept my interest. Nice job.