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This is good writing with scripture brought in nicely. :)
Very nice.

Interesting piece, well written. (You changed tense in the very last sentence - perhpas that was intentional? - I'm not quite convinced it works.)The message in the bottle was an intriguing part of the story because you left it unresolved.
very nice, thank you
I too was intrigued by the message in the bottle. In addition, I enjoyed the sensory images of the ocean. When you describe your trials, the reader can truly feel your pain. Thank you for sharing.
Wow. I'd like to think I'd be a strong in the Lord as this person is if my children were kidnapped. That's every parents worst nightmare. Generally, a well-written peice-- just a few grammatical errors and awkwardly worded phrases. But that certainly didn't detract from the vivid imagery of the ocean or this parent's pain. You did a good job of helping us understand that this person felt lost. Keep up the good work!