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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Chillax (04/03/14)
Paper fans flappin.
Shoes tappin.
Melodic sounds of Jesus’ love .
The unmistakable sound of leather black-backed bible pages.
The echo of familiar bible verses.
Cries at the altar for peace, reconciliation, and justice.
The reverberation of angelic, polyphonic choir voices.
The repeated 'tap-tap' of my white buckle shoes kissing each other.
Momma uttering in my ear, “Relax, chile. Stop fidgeting”.

Syncopated hand-claps of exultation.
A wailing Hammond organ, thumping piano, and pounding drums.
Large-brimmed hats that ‘speak’ long before its model says a word.
The squeak of black leather shoes against the store-front tile.
The 'clink clink clink' of coins hitting the base of the oak-stained, gold-trimmed collection plate.
Testimonies of salvation, sanctification, and justification.
Shouts of praise, freedom, and jubilation.
Scratching sounds as I seek relief from my itchy pink, pastel dress.
Momma’s unsympathetic warning in my ear, “I said sit still, chile. Chill out!”.


A Celebration of the baptism of the Spirit.
The interjection of multiple holy-dance breaks.
The babel of women slain in the spirit.
Unified prayers for peace, healing, and reconciliation.
The joyous call of the pastor, “Can I get an amen?”.
The enthusiastic response of parishioners, “AMEN! Preach brother!”.
The ecstatic resonation of Sister Jones speaking in tongues.
My giggles as I playfully mock Sister Jones.
The whack of Momma’s hand against my thigh as she gives me the evil eye and utters not a word.
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C D Swanson 
04/11/14
I saw the entire service in my mind's eye through your well written and descriptive piece. Very well done!

God bless~
Larry Whittington
04/14/14
Through the eyes of a child we see they can't worship the same as the adults.

Nice illustration of that point in your story-poem.

Good writing.
C D Swanson 
04/17/14
Congrats!

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
04/18/14
Oh this is brilliant. I haven't been to a Church like this before, though I've seen some on TV. It makes me wish they had them in my rural area. You had me from the first word. (I'm not a big poetry fan either so that says a lot) Many people think you can't show a picture as much in poetry, but that it's more about the emotions the words evoke. This is a perfect example of doing both! Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 18 overall. The highest rankings can be found in the message boards. I'm not sure if Gracie Sparks is your birth name or a pen name, but it certainly fits your writing style. :)