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Topic: Drip (04/25/13)
It’s early Thursday morning at the U of A and Jimmy has just read the second book of Proverbs as it’s the second day of May.

He finished up his reading with a prayer, “Dear Heavenly Father, please help me to use this knowledge from your word today to bring me closer to You and Holy Spirit please guide my path today and help me to reach others and come to understand the things that You have done, are doing, and are going to do for me and us all.”

As Jimmy finished his prayer, he gets linked by his boss, “Jimmy, can you please go help Mark over at Rose Administration? He’s got a really heavy store front door that has to be lifted off the hinges and repaired before the end of the day.”

Jimmy replied, “Sure, AJ, I’ll take care of it.”

As Jimmy heads to Rose Administration, he rushes through his head trying to think of all the tools that he might need for the project. As he approaches Mark, he’s reminded of how big the door is that he’s been through many times before and taken for granted of its large size.

Mark looks at Jimmy and says, “I sure hope you ate your Wheaties today! Jimmy, grab the door and help me lift it up, but be careful. One slip and it could smash us!”

Both men lifted with all their might, “Ungh!”

“Jimmy look out!!!”

Jimmy looks up and the last thing he remembers is the massive door falling on top of him. He blinks twice and before losing consciousness, he sees a large drop of his blood…….DRIP!

“Jimmy, wake up!’

Jimmy opens his eyes to a familiar voice, but soon sees it doesn’t match anyone standing around him.

“Jimmy, I’m going to allow you the privilege to see, hear, and feel just a few of the things I experienced at the end of my time as a human.”

“But Lord, I don’t know if I can bear what you did.” Jimmy responds.

Jesus replies, “I will make sure you can handle it.”

As Jimmy gets his bearings, he begins to pick up the extremely heavy door. When the full weight of the door hits him, Jesus replies, “Imagine the weight of this door on you as long as the weight of the cross was on me before I got nailed to it, while everyone was spitting, clawing, and calling me all kinds of filthy names, kicking, hitting and many other things as well.”

Everyone at the scene is standing back. Not knowing what to do. Jimmy is standing with the weight of the door on him, saying, “Lord, forgive me! The weight of the cross shouldn’t be bared by you!!”

Jesus spoke to Jimmy, “Jimmy, don’t you know how much I love you and the whole world?”

Not only could Jimmy feel every spat, every scratch, every name and taunt, not to mention the aches and pains of the cross that wasn’t his to bear. Jimmy was given the opportunity to see the cross upright with Jesus on it!

As he looks into Jesus’s eyes, he starts crying uncontrollably. Jesus replies, “Jimmy, I say again, do you know how much I love you and the rest of the world?”

“How much Lord?” He again looks up to Jesus with his arms stretched to the max and spikes driven through his body.

Jesus replies with every ounce of LOVE IN ALL CREATION and says, “This much.”

As he stares at Jesus and cries his eyes out, he notices the stream of blood making its way down Jesus’s leg and all the way to the edge of his toe, then….DRIP!!!

“JIMMY!!!”

With a quick draw of breath, Jimmy is back on the ground and Mark and AJ catches the door before it hits him again.

We do not have to have something so elaborate to happen to us for us to know what Jesus has done, is doing, and will do for us. This is just a reminder, whatever 100 or 1000, it is for us! Just remember, don’t complain about the little crosses that we have to bear or the little names we get called or even the bumps and scrapes that we go through in life. All we need to think about is each and every drop of blood that comes off his toe on that cross…DRIP!!!!
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Phyllis Inniss 
05/05/13
Yes, we do have to remember always the blood that dripped from Christ on the Cross and that He did it for us.
Yvonne Blake 
05/07/13
Interesting point of view - It was a little confusing in the middle, but it taught a good lesson. Keep writing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
05/07/13
I really enjoyed this story. You made your characters feel real and the dialog natural. I don't think I have ever read a story just like this before and I totally enjoyed it. I don't think you needed the last paragraph because you did such a fantastic job of showing your message to the reader. The ending is something many writers struggle with. I may have just had one of the friends say something like"You're okay Jimmy. Everything will be just fine." And then have Jimmy smile and say something like "I have no doubt, no doubt at all."
That might not be the exact way that you want to show it, but it reinforces to the reader, that because Jimmy has Jesus in his life that Jimmy knows, even if a door crashes down on him things are okay because Jesus endured so much more to make sure that we will be okay in the end. I think this is a powerful story and your words really touched me. Great bit of writing here.