The Official Writing Challenge
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You have a great idea for a story. I can definitely relate to how stressful planning a party really can be. There are so many things to do and plan for, not to mention the MC needs to do all of this while keeping up with a toddler!

However, I had a difficult time trying to figure out who was talking. Try to add some descriptions between the dialog to let the reader know who is talking. For example before the opening dialog you could add something like Christina plopped into the chair and covered her face with her hands. That would not only let the reader know that Christina is talking but it would also show the reader she is frustrated and tired.

Your message is really a nice one and one I think just about everyone needs reminding of from time to time. I liked how the mother gently calmed Christina with words from the scripture. They were a perfect fit for your story. Good job.
Good story. Remember to put quotation marks around dialog, and proofread your work. Thank you.