The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a sweet story. I really enjoyed the characters and could sense the bond between the two kid's.

The one thing I'd suggest is to be careful not to give the ending away with the title. Because of the word surprise I knew something good was going to happen. So I was able to easily predict the ending.

You did a nice job of writing on topic and I enjoyed how you focused on the kids interactions. I liked that the little girl knew to pray. I also liked that you showed the prayer in the story. Many people don't know that praying is like talking to a dear friend. You did a nice job with this one.
Awwww. What a tender sweet and completely engaging read. I loved it, I am such a sentimental fool. Love stories like this. Great job.

Thanks! God Bless~
I just LOVED how you turned the story around from something that seemed like it was going to end badly, into something joyous.

Great work and God bless.