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This is a powerful piece and it ripped at my heart. I think you handle the topic in a creative way while delivering a powerful message.

I'm a little nervous that some people may not totally get it. Perhaps if you added some more details about your parents and then more details about the beating at the end.

I did understand it though and it makes my heart hurt that there are so many people who are in an abusive relationship and don't know how to get out of it. I think you did a brilliant job of showing how important prayer is. Often people say the least I can do is pray but as you so aptly demonstrated it is the most one can do. God bless and thanks for having the courage to tackle such a difficult subject.
This is very powerful - excellent use of repetition. Very good.
This made me cringe and my heart lurched wanting to reach out to the MC. The inernal dialogue was beautifully done, and realistically portrayed. The last line made me sad...It seems like she may be contemplating suicide.

With God and prayers, all things can change. God is our shield, and the MC realizes is my hope that she "climbs" out of the hold of despair before it is too late.

Great job. Thank you for this story. God Bless~
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