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This is a beautiful piece. You captured the nature of Jesus in your words.

Be careful of the little typos like to instead of too, forgive being one word, and dieing should be dying.

You did touch my heart with these sweet words that describe Jesus. Nicely done.
Lovely rhyme!

One thing I saw that Shann didn't mention.. In last stanza, Our should have been used instead of are.

Help with proofing available from a lot of faithwriters if you want it.

Keep writing!

This was a beautiful and loving tribute to Jesus and our Father. I loved the flow and the clearly have a heart for our Lord,and your words prove it.

I have typos and erros in most of my entries, each week. It's hard sometimes to see our "own."

The only thing I could see, besides your loving tribute...was "Father" as respect to our God, should always be a capitalized.

However,I believe, that errors do not detract from the beautiful words you have written here. Thank you, I loved it.

I look forward to future entries with your heart for God.

God Bless you~