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The story progressed well and was certainly surprising. A great start to a continuing saga.
This was a good story and had an unexpected ending...Nicely done! I enjoyed it - clever and different. God Bless~
Delightful! Gave me goosebumps!
Clever and a great premise for a Hallmark movie. Great job!
I really liked this story. It grabbed me from the beginning and I eagerly kept reading.

I have to admit, I was a tad disappointed when Martha turned out to be a mysterious angel. I think the ending would have really had more of a punch if you hadn't fallen on the often used angel that disappeared. But that is just my personal opinion.

I think you did a delightful job developing the characters and showing that being unselfish has its own rewards.
I enjoyed this story. It was well-told, and I didn't see the end coming. Good job!
This was really well written. The ending was cliched.

Congratulations for ranking 6th in level 1!