The Official Writing Challenge
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This is beautifully written and heartbreaking. It should be required reading for teen girls in every youth group. ONly two suggestions: hit "Preview" before you submit, and you will see the formatting errors and be able to correct them before this is published. Also, I don't think you need the disclaimer at the beginning; it would be far more powerful without it.
This was a very unique approach to an age-old story. I pray young girls will read this and think twice.
I agree it would be more powerful without the disclaimer; well written, great perspective. God bless
no disclaimer needed.
Beautifully and tastefully worded, with a very clear and vital message. Well-done!
Very passionate and powerfully written. You truly have something to say, here. Odd typos??-looks like something wrong in the formatting rather than regular typos. Thats the only negative I see. Be blessed!
So beautifully written with such sensitivity and insight. Every teen needs to read this - but whether they would listen is another story. I don't have a problem with the disclaimer - would probably have included it myself had I written it - but that's just me. Well done.
Beatrice, this was beautiful and rated very well with the Level 1 judges. You placed 9th in the Level 1 rankings. So be encouraged.

I noticed that some people have commented on typos, or formatting errors. I've explained on the message boards why this happens, so that when people leave feedback they don't think that you haven't checked your work. It's because, I suspect, you are using a computer set for a different language - possibly Chinese. When you preview your submission, your browser shows that everything is fine. But for other computers set for English, it can show up some odd symbols for hyphens, apostrophes and quotation marks.

Always use plain text (without formatting) and then it doesn't hurt to go over the apostrophes, hyphens and quotations marks in the submission box - just to be on the safe side.

Other than that, I think the only thing that let it down was that it was a little bit loose for the topic. Also, I have to agree that a disclaimer at the start spoils things a little. But other than that, it was very good, and I'm looking forward to seeing some very good work from you in the future. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)