The Official Writing Challenge
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11/14/09
I like the analogy of how a color stain is more easily removed than a relationship stain. I understood most of your paragraphs leading up to the 'stain' metaphors, but I'm not sure purple is really associated with commercialism, anymore than any other color, (unless you could give a strong example where people are attracted to purple and so manufacturers capitalize on it in particular). Good work.
11/15/09
I feel like I am being pulled all over the place with this story. Perhaps you could just use the more pertinant examples to tie in the gist of the story.
I think you could write several different stories from this one piece, and they would all be interesting. With a 750 word limit, it's important to focus on just one main idea and develop that. Hard to do when you have so many good thoughts, but necessary when writing on a topic. I like what the mother said at the end of the story- so true.