The Official Writing Challenge
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interesting twist on the Good Samaritan, showing how it may have affected the traveler. I can see a lot more to this work. I hope you write it.
I was certainly drawn into another time period and could feel the apprehension, then resolve of Talon to face his biggest challenge. Over use of "He'd". Also, I'm used to seeing it coupled with the helping verb, but not the main verb,i.e. "He'd an impulse." It could be that I just don't read this genre very much, but just in case...
This was a wonderful, inviting story. I would have liked to hear more. Good job.