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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)
"Mummy, everyone is going to the dam for a swim on Sunday, can I go too?"
There was a questioning look on Treasures young face. Although she wanted the answer to be yes, she knew perfectly well what it would surely be.
"Can you swim," asked her wise mother.
"Well no," came the, whats that go to do with it reply. Treasure twisted and untwisted the platt end of her long blond hair. She envisioned in the dreamland of her mind, the fun to be experienced at the only swimming source in the small community.
"Everyone who goes there can swim," reminded Mummy. "And old Mr Lawrence has reminded you children over and over that he built the dam for the animals to drink the water, not for you children to take over."
"Oh we won't try and take it anywhere," Treasure assured in earnest. "I think it would be too heavy for that!"
Treasure could already picture a rubber inner tube out in the middle of the dam with herself floating contentedly inside. With the warm sunshine planting kisses on her skin and the smell of cows and sweet fresh grass, it was perfect. Many older neighourhood children would be there having fun and she wanted to enjoy the day with them. Mummy was watching her youngsters expressional face and could almost read her thoughts aloud.
"Aren't we having Endeavour Tea that evening at church?" Mother innocently asked. Treasure had fogotten all about that. It was a wonderful day when the children finishing Sunday School were given a sandwich and a drink then played games until the Tea. All the mothers grouped together to cook and prepare in the church kitchen. Heavenly aromas had the children playing guessing games about what foods were being prepared. They played this game while sitting on the ground waitng to Skip Rope or play Hop Scotch in the side church yard.
Endeavour Tea to young Treasure was one of the happiest times of the year and one remembered for long after. In the underprivileged country village where special foods were kept soley for Christmas and Easter , Endeavour Tea brought everyone together in unity to enjoy a special time. Pot Luck stew was always on the menu. Everyone brought something to include in the huge simmering Pot and put it together to make a wonderful delicious treat. Mrs Wilson made the best bread and Mrs Foley the best butter and shared their gifts to bless the day. With a variety of home grown summer vegetables there were plenty of mixed salads. And of course mangos picked ripe and juicy made wonderful iceblocks and slices. One could dream all day about the delicious food. When tummies were full and happy and all was cleared away and cleaned up, Pastor gave a short sermon on being thankful then led the chorus singing. Thinking about all of this, Treasures eyes flooded with tears.
"Oh Mummy, I am a mean girl, everyone would miss me terribly if I wasn't at the Tea."
Mummy looked surprised,"Why Treasure, you are so right. It will be a glorious summer day, the sun will be shining the birds will be singing and I am so glad you want to be there."
Picking up her bible she turned to Psalms 106:1 "Praise the Lord. Give thanks to the Lord for He is good; His love endures forever. (N.I.V. Translation)
"God loves us so much doesn't he Mummy."
"More than we could ever imagine Treasure, more than anything or anyone her mother whispered.......
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Joanne Sher 
07/18/09
Nice descriptions, especially of the Endeavor Tea.

Just my opinion, but I think you focused too much on the desire to swim, when the Tea was meant to be the real focus..

I could feel the girl's sadness
diana kay
07/18/09
I really liked this peice and I think the desire to swim and the resolution with the pot luck tea was lovely. I did think it was balanced and I loved the relationship between the small child and her Mum. A few typos and punctuation in the wrong places. i.e you wrote Treasures instead of Treasure's in one place and there was only one little girl!! Keep writing It was beautiful and such an unusual name!