The Official Writing Challenge
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The last section troubles me - we know many have died at natives' hands. HOWEVER what a GREAT read and the story is "twinkly." (good thing!)
You did a good job of portraying the mixed motives of the early European explorers of Africa, and their (?misplaced) confidence that God was automatically on their side. I enjoyed the way you built up the suspense with them getting lost and then 'attacked'.
Hi like your story - like the ending. thanks.
Hehe Nice job with this one. I particularly liked your descrptions of the sizes of the "warriors." I could just picture a little guy who could barely walk among them. :)

The ending seemed a bit rushed to me, however. That word count can be hard to work with sometimes!

Great job! Keep writing.
Whew, what a relief! I am glad it turned out so well. God was definitely with them.
I enjoyed reading this.
Hi Lance. Just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, "The Astounding Expedition," actually did very well in the Africa Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 1, placing 13th in that Level. Competition in Level 1 is always very intense, so well done.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.

Again, well done. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)