The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a very good job of portraying the ambivalence of that time period.
This story strikes me as being very bittersweet. I liked this memory/tribute of Bob and how he was portrayed not as a coward, but a human being during a conflicted time. You did pretty good, I only wish there was more of a "story-feel" to it to keep me in this atmosphere you've created instead of just standing on the outside. Thanks for sharing! ^_^
Perhaps more show, instead of tell would really push this over the top.

This is a good narrative of a memory, but leaves me feeling a bit detached from the situation.

I don't know if this makes any sense at all; it's almost like a third person feel in first person.

I enjoyed reading about the friendship between you and Bob. I like that you leave it up to the reader to decide whether Bob was right or not.
Hi Karen. I'm running a week late, but just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry "Canadian Escape," actually did very well in the Canada Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings placing 14th in Level 1.

Competition in Level 1 is always very intense, so you did extremely well.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.

You definitely deserve a pat on the back. Well done. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)