The Official Writing Challenge
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11/15/08
Really well written. I am so happy the one child who they believed wouldn't make it did. You opened my eyes to the importance of enjoying our family. Great job.
11/15/08
It's always the one you least expect. Good job.
11/17/08
You know, I kind of like this but ...
11/17/08
seriously, it's a lovely piece of bitter-sweet writing. Well done.
but.... Great title for a great story. Once the buts started......I kind of figured that James Allen would come. I felt sad for her, but happy that she would be reunited with her son.
Great writing.
Hooray for James Allen and those like him, who are able to keep a part of their hearts in the past. This is a well-written piece certainly told as a commentary on today's busy life styles. It is heartbreaking, but there does always seem to be at least one who understands. Nice job, indeed!
Great title, Great writing, Great story. . .

:)
11/20/08
This was a rather bittersweet story. I'm glad at least one was able to make it.
Really well put together - good writing! I get the feeling James Allen is mom's favorite child. I saw a few technical problems (apostrophes, tense, and such) but nothing major, and they don't take away from the great story. PM me if you want details. I liked your entry a lot. :) Cat