The Official Writing Challenge
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Oooh, what an excellent twist! I loved this, it was so different and fun. I was feeling very sorry for this 'black sheep'. You did sort of switch POV's at the end there though, it might be best if it was all kept as one POV. Nice job though! ^_^
06/14/08
This is a really good piece. I loved all the foreshadowing for who the "black sheep" was...and I almost felt like you put Jesus' name in too soon. Although I can't imagine where you could have put it in later! :)