The Official Writing Challenge
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Very interesting. I would love to read more and find out how 'home" applies. Great characters.
Interesting setting. I'm a little oonfused as to what kind of reeducation they were getting. Is this part of bigger story? It certainly could be made into one.
well done..keep writing.
Good MC, and interesting voice. I think you needed much more room than 750 words to write this story! I did like the note of hope at the end, but it's so faint, it was almost nonexistent. Otherwise, good job! ^_^
I too, am interested to know more of this story. I caught that this was a new "home", but I didn't see how family fit in. Imaginative story, though--keep writing.
Very descriptive and it puts the reader right in the middle of the action, which I really enjoyed. Keep up the great writing!
The suspense and tension is well done here. I hope your MC gets away-looks like he may have an ally. Keep writing, I want to read more.