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Topic: Sibling(s) (05/01/08)
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TITLE: Big Brother's Shadow | Previous Challenge Entry
By Kathy Chatfield
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
(Fond memories and birthday wish)
Do you remember when we were little
how you had this shadow that followed you around
It must of annoyed you, to a frown
I know I loved you and still do
But I'm sure you're glad, the clinging,I outgrew
A lot of things, I don't remember, like I would like to
Which makes me blue
But having a big brother...I know you will help carry me
through
Growing up on the farm, I really miss
I like to think back on the times & reminisce
Working hard,as well as, having fun
Sometimes I wish we could step back & rerun
Bailing hay,picking rock
Gathering the milk cows at 5 o'clock
Making snow castles & playing snow ball fights
We couldn't of been in so much delight
From sun up to sun down we always had things to do
Going on vacations to Minnesota, that was long overdo
So many memories of the fun times we had
Doesn't give room for my heart to be sad
A special time that I will hold in my heart,though
Is when you had part in saving my life, I know
Mom went outside to get some cold water for my bath
And we were playing marbles,and one rolled in my path
The metal bathtub was behind me as I backed up and fell
And in a split second the burning of hot water, felt like hell
Without hesitation or a minute to think
You pulled me out of the hot water without even a blink
God gave me a big brother of an angel that day
Not knowing what was in my future to play
I was covered in burns
And everyone was concerned
But as time went by
The doctors were mystified
For you see God's grace was already known
For in time no burns were even evident to be shown
But what has been really hard & sad
Is not having mom & dad
So as we get older
I hope we both can lean on on each shoulder
To whisper in one another's ear
With maybe a tear
Words of encouragement & love
Will be like having dad & mom, whispering from above
Even though I'm no longer your shadow,,,morning,noon,& night
You'll always be in my heart's sight
Because I love you so much
Someway,some how I hope we can always stay in touch
For the good times, bad times, & in between times, I will always care
Your my brother and I will always have you in my prayer
We're not alone on this earth
For God gave us family & that has a lot of worth
May your life be filled with much bliss
And sealed with an angel kiss
Happy Birthday from your sis!
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I only have one little typo-was it "Have" instead of "Of" in this line? : It must of annoyed you, to a frown
Otherwise, this is really great and heartfelt! ^_^
You might consider getting a buddy to help you with some punctuation problems.
I could really feel the story of your love for your brother that you were telling, and of how much you looked up to him.