The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story could use a bit of combing but the core of it is superb. The most important thing in writing is the mind (and heart)of the writer. I pray you will persevere to develop and expand your talent. Spaces between paragraphs make it easier on the the eye of the reader. This story really touched me.
There is much evidence of grace here!

A few problems with the writing mechanics--I'll just pick one, though, and suggest that you stick with one POV. You started with Mr. Griggs' POV, then switched to the young pastor's POV halfway through.

The story is very touching.
Very vivid descriptions, and a wonderful message.

Breaking the paragraphs up more would help with readability.

Very nicely written!