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TITLE: Just A Few Miles Down The Road | Previous Challenge Entry
By Clarence (Sonny) White
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The old man sat quietly
Waiting out his time
Drawing on his bank of memories
As old thoughts filled his mind
Seems it was only yesterday
With Mom and Dad he would go
To a small vine covered country chuch
Just a few miles down the road
With eager anticipation
He would gladly find a space
On a bench with other children
In this very special place
With book in hand the teacher
Would read to them a spell
All kind of bible stories
Like Jona and the whale
David and Goliath
God ascending to above
This very special lady
Taught them all about God’s love
Taught them to recite “The Lord’s Prayer”
They memorized it well
Taught them there is a heaven
And also there’s a hell
It was she, who helped to shape his life
The direction that he should go
In Sunday school, a little country church
Just a few miles down the road
Proverbs 22 verse 6 KJV; Train up a child in the way he should go: and when he is old, he will not depart from it.
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One improvement would be to work on having a pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables. That would make it flow more easily for your readers.
I really like your title; it feels rustic and real.
A couple of typos -- other than "church." Jonah needs the 'h', and Bible should always be capitalized.
This is very nice. Good job with the topic.