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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write in the ADVENTURE genre (05/24/07)
“Do you want to go do something fun?”

“When we do something fun, I end up in trouble.”

“This time you won’t get caught.”

“I always get caught and that’s not fun. If we do something fun, I don’t want to get grounded.”

“Yeah right. I am going to find Jeff. He’s always up for something fun.” Sam walked toward Jeff’s house. I wanted to follow him but I knew better.

Jeff and Sam are my two closest friends. We have done everything together since birth. Lately they have been doing a lot of bad stuff that I don’t agree with.

They are not the only ones I could be friends with. The problem? We live in Stony Creek, which is a very small town. There are two other guys in our grade, but they are immature. They still play with Matchbox cars. There are girls in my grade too but they just like to giggle and braid hair.

By three that afternoon, I had only straightened my room and helped my sister learn her Bible verse, when my mom came in, “Honey, can you go to the store to get a few things for dinner? ”

“Sure mom.” She handed me a list and money, and I left.

The grocery store is small. Mr. Bickles, the owner, greeted me as I walked past the two checkout counters.

I had everything on the list and was headed toward the front when I heard a loud CRASH! There was yelling and loud barking. I hurried to the front to see what happened.

Well that was dumb because I am afraid of dogs. And now was one coming straight toward me! I jumped into a broom closet and slammed the door. Luckily the door had a glass window so I stood on my tiptoes and looked out.

There were two dogs. Mr. Bickles was trying to coax one dog outside with a box of dog biscuits. The cashier and stock-boy were chasing the other, trying to catch him. But the dogs found the meat department instead. Mr. Bickles threw the treats aside and joined his employees chasing the dogs.

I wanted out but when I tried to open the door, I found that it was locked. I couldn’t get out. I was glad I was not afraid of small spaces too.

On my tiptoes again, I looked out for help when Sam and Jeff ran in. I yelled for help but they never came near the closet because they stopped at the cash registers. I watched as they emptied out both registers! They stuffed the money in their pockets, grabbed some candy, and turned to run out.

But Sam stopped saw my face peering out of the closet. Running over, he opened the door. “So this is your something fun? Sitting in a broom closet? Come on. I’ll cut you in.”

“No this is wrong.”

The barking became louder and I noticed the dogs running towards me. Instinct overtook me and I ran out the door before even knew what I was doing.

After I reached the side of the building, Sam patted my shoulder and said, “I knew you’d do the right thing.”

I wasn’t sure what “right” was anymore. I didn’t want to see my friends get into trouble, but they had done something awful. If I told on them they would never be my friends again.

“A good man obtains favor from the Lord, but the Lord condemns a crafty man.” Proverbs 12:2 (NIV) My sister’s memory verse ran through my mind. Then I knew what to do.

I marched back into the store without looking back. I had to do the right thing. Like it or not, I was going to have to tell my on my friends.

When I walked in I could see the huge mess and in the middle of it, Mr. Bickles was crying. I felt horrible for him.

“Mr. Bickles, I know what happened.”

To make a long story short, Sam and Jeff never talked to me again; they went to juvenile detention. My mom let me stay and help clean up. I was mopping around the meat counter when I felt a tap on my shoulder. It was Mr. Bickles.

“I want you to meet someone. This is my nephew Dan. He just moved in with me and is your age. You guys will share classes at church and school.”

I was very glad I did the right thing.
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Jan Ackerson
06/02/07
A good story for young teens to read.

I was unclear of the age of your narrator; he seemed sometimes to be quite young, and others perhaps teenaged. Perhaps some clarification there? And watch your tenses.

The scene in the store was exciting and tense--good job!
Kristen Hester
06/03/07
Nice story. I enjoyed the early dialouge, but would have liked to know more about who was talking. Also, I think there were some places where words were left out. It was an adventure! Thank you.