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This is a VERY good piece. It is emotional and honest and I appreciate that. One thing: you mentioned your 'father-in-law' in the first paragraph, and then you said that "John" died, and then 'Poppy' and then in your conclusion, you called him 'Dad.' You might want to keep the first reference to him, and then call him 'Dad' the rest of the time, or Poppy, or something, just keep it consistent. Great piece. Keep on writing!
I had a father very similar to your father-in-law. Brings back great memories.
My father resembled your father-in-law. He's with the Lord also. Brings back precious memories. Nice job.
Very homeward bound devotional. I thought this was very well written and enjoyed reading this.
I love the down-home feel of this tender little story.
This piece was well-written and stirs the inspirational part of the reader's soul. I have only two critiques. The first is that I, too, feel that you would confuse the reader less if you mentioned just one name (or nickname) for your father-in-law and stuck to that one throughout the piece. My other suggestion is simply to note which version of the Bible you used for your verse.
Thanks for sharing this inspirational piece.
Beautiful piece. It was heartfelt and inspirational.
Thanks for sharing!