The Official Writing Challenge
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Very interesting. Good job!
Very good. It brought tears to my eyes.
Some beautiful writing here. FOr example: 'My father taught me never to play with fire. But tonight God had allowed another burning flame to be extinguished.' I question the time-frame a little, becasue I tend to prefer to see things happen more gradually, as I think they generally do in real life. Now, of course, you're going to tell me this is gospel-true!! Anyway, a good read, thank you.
A very heartwarming story and I liked reading it. Nicely done.
Well written, I feel that this is a story in need of expansion, unfortunately, the 750 word limit prevents that - a sudden realization is not uncommon in tragic situations - while your narration was brief it accomplished the task.