Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

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I agree that the technical grammar terms are very helpful and wish all writers would master them for that very reason. However, Jan is wonderful for, and great at, explaining these things to folks who haven't mastered them.
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swfdoc1 wrote:Jan is wonderful.
She is, indeed! :D

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Steve wrote:Jan is wonderful for, and great at, explaining these things to folks who haven't mastered them.


This is your class, Jan, so please forgive me for responding to Steve with a statement and question.


Steve,
It's true, we're not all college professors ( and I know you didn't mean to sound condescending), but the terms you used were quite easily understood. All information is helpful, useful, and readily absorbed for most writers who are eager to learn, no matter the source or how long it takes.
I hesitated before putting a comma after "learn" but did it anyway. Right or wrong? :D

In the spirit of learning, I also ask:
Am I right in omitting a comma before "but" in the above sentence because the sentence contains a compound predicate? Or do I have more to learn?


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My point was not that someone has to be a college professor to understand these terms; quite the opposite. Everyone can and should. My point was that many people—for whatever reason—don’t currently know them. However, I will add to that that I have met many people who either don’t want to learn them or believe (incorrectly, in my opinion) that they can’t. My opinion about what people do and don’t know is based largely on teaching this stuff at the graduate level and polling my students on which terms they knew.

To take the most germane example, one will “never” master the use of commas without understanding the concept of restrictive vs. non-restrictive (phrases, clauses, appositives, etc.) Yet, year after year, when I would ask my students whether they knew what these terms meant, virtually no one ever did—maybe 5 or 6 out of ~400 over 10 years. So, Jan could have answered some of the questions that have arisen in this thread using those terms. She could have either left folks to go look up the terms themselves so they could understand her answer, or she could have explained them and then used them to answer the questions, hoping everyone would master the concept right away. Instead, she answered the questions using non-technical language.

Both the comma you put in and the comma you left out were the correct choices.
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I think one of the reasons why it can be confusing is because in your second example, Lillian, the comma placement changes by adding a single word--I.
I hesitated before putting a comma after "learn, " but I did it anyway.

Such a tiny word makes a big difference. I also think sometimes (especially if reading to myself) I will add that extra noun and not even realize I did or didn't have it in. Does that make sense?
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Steve wrote:Both the comma you put in and the comma you left out were the correct choices.
Thanks Steve (and Jan, too), for the opportunity to learn about the nitty-gritty aspects of writing. "Be a better writer" says it all.


Much appreciated.

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good.
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great!
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great job
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Hi Jan,

I found this short lesson helpful. When I read #6, my initial reaction was to place a comma after bracelet and wrist, however, when I remove the words between the commas, it just didn't make sense. So I'm learning as I go.

For example, #6 A gold bracelet, (delete) shimmering on her wrist, (end delete) Deb waved frantically to try to hail a passing cab.

When I step back to look at it, the sentence structure made no sense.

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Jan, your Commas with conjunctions link is broken. It will not open the lesson.

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JudySauer wrote:Hi Jan,

I found this short lesson helpful. When I read #6, my initial reaction was to place a comma after bracelet and wrist, however, when I remove the words between the commas, it just didn't make sense. So I'm learning as I go.

For example, #6 A gold bracelet, (delete) shimmering on her wrist, (end delete) Deb waved frantically to try to hail a passing cab.

When I step back to look at it, the sentence structure made no sense.

:thankssign
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In this case, the words a gold bracelet shimmering on her wrist act as an adjective to describe Deb. It's the same as if you had a one-word adjective describing her:

Panting, Deb waved frantically to try to hail a passing cab.

Or a slightly longer adjective phrase:

With a shout, Deb waved frantically to try to hail a passing cab.

Therefore:

A gold bracelet shimmering on her wrist, Deb waved frantically to try to hail a passing cab.

I hope it makes more sense to you now...let me know if you have further questions.
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JudySauer wrote:Jan, your Commas with conjunctions link is broken. It will not open the lesson.

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Judy, I tried the link from here and it works, so I'm not sure what to do about that.
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I'm using the link in Essential Lessons for Beginning Writers.

Will try again - have made several attempts. Maybe you're my lucky charm.
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Jan,

I get the message, You cannot post edits in this forum.

Maybe it's just the one link in Beginning Writers.

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