Thank you so much!
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~Cara
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Thanks for this sentence! It's got some nice imagery, and the phrases build well on each other.kafrak wrote:Once upon a time, before we understood time, when the world had first been created; God created a small serpentine creature.
Caleb, I like it. The only thing I'd change is the middle sentence; I'd simply switch the order of the two clauses so that it doesn't begin with a quote, lest the reader think that's still the King of Hearts speaking. Thus:Caleb Cheong wrote:Hi Jan!
What do you think about this as a beginning?
"Begin at the beginning and go on till you come to the end: then stop," advised the King of Hearts in Alice in Wonderland."Good advice, but more easily said than done," you might be tempted to respond. Surely, no part of writing can be more daunting than coming up with an effective beginning.