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Vonnie wrote:I love the limerick poem but very seldom write poetry. This one is not an exact rhyme but wanted to post it anyway.

Every week Jan has a lesson
Giving all an invite to the session
If you come to stay
And you'd do what she'd say
Then your writing would not keep you quessin'

I wrote these years ago but I'll submit them for critique.
First, a haiku:

I see you flying
in defiance of science
stay free bumblebee

Then three limericks (the last two just to break the rules )

A gallant old gent from Jafar
Desired to buy a new car.
He had money enough
Although counting was tough...
All pennies in ten thousand jars.

Now, to break the rules:

At Limericks my talent is fine,
I write them each night as I dine...
But it seems rather poor
That right after line four
It never fails that I get too many words in the last line.

My brother, his sur-name is Mort
Gives a totally different report.
His rhymes would be fine
But his very last line
Is short.

In all fairness I should write a new one, too. Sooo...

Is anything wrong with my style?
You know I've been writing awhile.
I gather each word
(I know... it's absurd)
Without using one bit of guile.

I love the ones that break the rules! So clever, and they really appeal to the word-play lover in me. Thanks for sharing them!