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I've made the corrections, and also chose the word lingered, instead stayed, in the 5th paragraph.

Thanks, Jan. I'll be reading the top entries in Level 4. And Jan, I knew it! I could "see" your humorous and artistic style--embedded in between the suggested sentences and observations--given by into the ratings report. You have a strong and distinctive voice. Thank you so much. God bless...

Oh, Jan! This is a masterful piece. I enjoyed every layer, from the beginning to the end. I fell in love with Junie, and I wanted to bite her too! :lol: My favorite paragraph: "I pulled my fingers away. "I won't touch it," I said, and immediately began a plan for getting the baby to m...

Hi Jan, here is my shot: Jocelyn frowned and yelled at me, "Why church people can't have fun, mom?" I'm going anyway, you know that..." She walked sideways at my front. Seated on the sofa, I kept looking at my tablet. I had to be careful to answer to that one. "It's not about bei...

Hi Jan, here is the link of my entry, Revival in Oopsville. It was rated and reviewed by the judges. You'll see that my conclusion was poor: https://www.faithwriters.com/wc-article-level2-previous.php?id=55539 Here is the suggestion given by the judges: "For years after, whenever Sister Belauca...

Hi Jan, 1) Here is a list of some ways that Junie is made to be a round character: a) Physical and psychological description: "I was far too big to be carried"; "I wanted my mothers lap"; "I was wildly covetous of that bassinet". b) Dialogue: "It's got no arms. Whe...

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Hi Jan, I chose the first paragraph of Ernest Hemingway's novel, The Old Man and the Sea: "He was an old man who fished alone in a skiff in the Gulf Stream and he had gone eighty-four days now without taking a fish. In the first forty days a boy had been with him. But after forty days without a...

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Hi Jan, here's my title and first sentence: 1. Title: Hitherto (J's series) 2. First sentence: The farmhouse porch light turned on. On the floor, a dropped off baby girl inside a basket, chewed a paper note with the words, please, don't worship or speak in tongues near this child . Thanks. Blessings.

"Come with me," Lukas said. Nadin followed him through a narrow and shadowy corridor. "We should call Rachel and the others," Nadin said. He shook his head and smirked. "Phones won't work here, Nadin. We're in another dimension, remember?" "You're so funny," s...

I had some doubts about the capitalization after question mark and exclamation point!

"Why should I do that?" she asked.

"Rachel, I love you." He smiled and held her hands.

"Philip is in love with Vida," she said.

This is great, Jan. Thanks.

Great!
Thanks.

Thanks, Jan.
This lesson covers a lot!

Hi Jan, I received today the ratings report on my article Revival in Oopsville. I had a 1.83 score on the topic category... I loved how you described Lavinia's skin color, as the pale tan of chicken eggs. Sister Pauline's developments are laugh-out-loud funny, but I got depressed a moment later. How...