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by GeraldShuler
Thu Jan 30, 2014 3:10 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be A Better Writer--ANTAGONISTS
Replies: 28
Views: 22186

Re: Be A Better Writer--ANTAGONISTS

I'm late responding but... So many of the entry examples that have been given are truly wonderful. I hope it's okay but I didn't use one of my challenge entries for this lesson. I picked one of my general entry stories for a reason. I want to know, Jan, who the real antagonist is in this one. It is ...
by GeraldShuler
Wed Nov 20, 2013 1:34 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--INTENTIONAL ANACHRONISM
Replies: 8
Views: 6488

Re: Be a Better Writer--INTENTIONAL ANACHRONISM

Sorry I'm late with this response. This was one I didn't want to miss because I enjoy writing in this style. I wrote one about about biblical characters using a laptop computer to get battle plans. I'm assuming that would qualify as intentional... right? Joshua Fit the Battle http://www.faithwriters...
by GeraldShuler
Mon Nov 04, 2013 5:23 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be A Better Writer--ALLUSION
Replies: 32
Views: 26786

Re: Be A Better Writer--ALLUSION

Jan, I am linking to a challenge piece because I have a question. In this piece I (hopefully) alluded to the plan of salvation throughout all of it. After reading your description of Allusion, I am doubting whether it really is allusion. Perhaps the "blood red spot at the center" is an allusion but ...
by GeraldShuler
Mon Oct 28, 2013 1:32 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION
Replies: 32
Views: 27136

Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION

Jan, after your comment about too much alliteration being annoying, I thought I would ask a question. Is it annoying if the "too much" is intentional? I wrote a poem that, from the outset, I had planned to use excessive alliteration to make it more fun to read. I didn't expect it to get Editor's Cho...
by GeraldShuler
Mon Oct 21, 2013 9:43 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY
Replies: 21
Views: 15705

Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY

Okay, I think I know what makes an allegory allegorical. I have another entry that was for the topic "seasons" where I used a tree to represent our lives, from birth to old age. Would that be allegory or symbolism? Come to think of it, is symbolism an inseparable part of allegory? "The Tree" http://...
by GeraldShuler
Mon Oct 21, 2013 6:18 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY
Replies: 21
Views: 15705

Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY

Jan, I wrote this challenge entry several years ago meaning for it to be an allegory. Nobody ever commented on it as an allegory and I was just wondering if I missed the point. Was it too obvious? Too vague? Not fantastical? Just wondering. The story is called "Steps". http://www.faithwriters.com/wc...
by GeraldShuler
Tue Oct 01, 2013 12:22 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES
Replies: 23
Views: 18548

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES

I agree 100% with all that you said... even the cookie sentence rewrite. And, yes, I WAS only joking about the judges. I have no doubts whatsoever about the integrity of the challenge system.
by GeraldShuler
Tue Oct 01, 2013 1:59 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES
Replies: 23
Views: 18548

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES

So…I guess what I’m saying is that you need to start working on having a specific voice—something that makes your writing identifiably yours . Jan, this lesson is scary! If we succeed in being good enough writers to have an "identifiable" voice then the challenge judges will know by our excellent w...
by GeraldShuler
Mon Sep 23, 2013 10:20 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES
Replies: 40
Views: 32461

Re: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES

Jan, those in Masters do still need help. I know... I is one. :roll: For the assignment, I chose a story that got several comments about its well written, effective style. The reason I picked this one is simple... for having so many comments about how good it was, it didn't get any notice at all fro...
by GeraldShuler
Mon Sep 16, 2013 7:33 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Replies: 102
Views: 85771

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING

I can see the error of my own editing... I already had it down to 100 words before I was half way through the editing. But here is my effort. Doreen didn’t look up from her book. She was aware of the big man sitting next to her so she inched closer to the window. As the train sped through the second...
by GeraldShuler
Mon Aug 26, 2013 6:51 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE
Replies: 43
Views: 26118

Re: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE

Would this entry have fit the topic better if the church people had been "whining about theology instead of praying about reality"? Granny could have made a statement like that in her long speech. Or would that have been no more effective than the whining sound? I agree this story had a lot of posit...
by GeraldShuler
Thu Aug 15, 2013 1:21 pm
Forum: Results and Highest Rankings
Topic: Winners for EXPIRED
Replies: 7
Views: 3673

Re: Winners for EXPIRED

I am humbled to be included with this wonderful writers and SHOCKED to see my name at the top of the list. I enjoyed the other entries far more than my own. Thank you.
by GeraldShuler
Wed Aug 07, 2013 2:06 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS
Replies: 27
Views: 25327

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS

Jan, this sample is from an editorial I wrote a few months ago. I was just wondering if you thought different transitions could have been chosen, and for what reasons. Your classes are an incredible encouragement to writers. Thank you for your time and effort. As a Christian newspaper publisher, I a...
by GeraldShuler
Tue Aug 06, 2013 10:28 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--POV
Replies: 8
Views: 7386

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--POV

This example is from a writing challenge several years ago. I think it does a better job of describing the main character than if a more traditional POV gave a long, word filled description of the character. The hard part in this piece was making the other characters come across with more understand...
by GeraldShuler
Thu Aug 01, 2013 11:32 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--FREE VERSE POETRY, #2
Replies: 24
Views: 21059

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--FREE VERSE POETRY

Jan, I wrote this one years ago. I see at least key word repetition and simile. Did I accidently get any others? I pity the man who measures his life in mediocre moments. If my life must be measured in moments Let them be spectacular moments. Life should be a vivid variety of vibrant memories. Each ...

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