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by Come forth
Sat Nov 23, 2013 6:25 pm
Forum: Results and Highest Rankings
Topic: Winners for LIVING IN A GOLDFISH BOWL CHALLENGE
Replies: 5
Views: 2909

Re: Winners for LIVING IN A GOLDFISH BOWL CHALLENGE

I really appreciate these challenges, they have helped me to improve my writing no end. But I also need to thank two other folk who deserve this 1st place ribbon every bit as much as I do; and of course first and foremost I must thank Dad and my wife Giovanna. Dave Walker is a brilliant writing budd...
by Come forth
Wed Nov 13, 2013 7:20 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS
Replies: 27
Views: 25781

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS

This is a timely lesson for me because I have just written a challenge entry that is very jumbled up. So the task before me is to bring structure and introduce smooth transitions.

And, of course, smooth transition are an important part of structure.

Thanks for the lesson, Graham.
by Come forth
Thu Nov 07, 2013 10:44 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION
Replies: 32
Views: 27959

Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION

Thanks for the feedback Jan; and for confirming what I already knew. I took note of what you said about using alliteration in titles when it didn't fit the mood; and therefore knew I was going too far and laying it on too thick in a piece which was not light and flimsy -- but I couldn't resist. Also...
by Come forth
Thu Nov 07, 2013 8:25 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION
Replies: 32
Views: 27959

Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION

Hi Jan, I've been missing in action for a week or two but glad to be catching up. I enjoyed this lesson and used alliteration in my last challenge entry; maybe I even used it a little too much. But I enjoyed deliberately looking for the opportunity -- particularly in the last line where I used it to...
by Come forth
Sat Oct 05, 2013 8:16 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES
Replies: 23
Views: 18908

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES

I'm coming in a bit later here; been very busy and haven't had time to think about all of this. I think sentence construction, and the difference between compound, complex, simple and plain old confusing :lol: sentences are a skillful way to convey emotion and to engage the reader in the story. Shor...
by Come forth
Mon Sep 30, 2013 12:10 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #14--THE WELL-CONSTRUCTED POEM
Replies: 37
Views: 37379

Re: #14--THE WELL-CONSTRUCTED POEM

Hi, I'd like to join in the revival of this thread. I've written poetry most of my life but, unlike a previous post on this thread, mine was not intentionally bad; just bad :lol: Anyway, here are 8 lines from a poem i recently posted in the critique circle (here: http://www.faithwriters.com/critique...
by Come forth
Mon Sep 23, 2013 6:00 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES
Replies: 40
Views: 33397

Re: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES

Jan, don't just do levels 1, 2 & 3. I'm in Masters but am far from a Master. I still love these lessons and gain from them. My sentence: "Splattered tomato covered her face." (BTW -- it was a FRESH tomato :lol: ) I fit into the category that you describe as 'just writing' without knowing or analyzin...
by Come forth
Thu Sep 19, 2013 10:16 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--POV
Replies: 8
Views: 7537

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--POV

Hi Jan, I wrote a story called "More Than A Name" for the challenge 'thump' (for those interested it is here http://www.faithwriters.com/wc-article-level2-previous.php?id=45982) This was NOT a true story, pure fiction, and yet a few readers felt and wanted to know if it was true. I didn't feel as if...
by Come forth
Wed Sep 18, 2013 1:44 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Replies: 102
Views: 87874

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING

Jan wrote: Still--my own crippling self-doubt (something I've fought all my life) . Oh how I identify with that statement. It is debilitating, soul wrenching and so hard to overcome. And yet others look at our writing, the mask that we have so strongly learnt to portray and don't believe we really s...
by Come forth
Wed Sep 18, 2013 1:22 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Replies: 102
Views: 87874

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING

Steve wrote:
Jan gets all the credit. If she didn't labor to put the lessons together and to respond to each post,
While this is true it still remains that I have learnt soooo much from your posts, in this and other threads, and my thanks remain.

Blessings, Graham.
by Come forth
Tue Sep 17, 2013 7:34 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Replies: 102
Views: 87874

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING

Oh, my kingdom for a semi colon! :lol: I think one of my main issues is that I don't 'think' through what I am doing from an educated point of view, if that even makes sense, but I write more from an intuitive, just get it down there, type of place. What I am learning from you, Jan (with Steve's val...
by Come forth
Mon Sep 16, 2013 8:43 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Replies: 102
Views: 87874

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING

I love and need this lesson -- I'm always far too wordy (even on forum posts) I didn't read anyone else's edit until after I wrote mine; but wish I had because they are good. Some good points in this lesson and i will refer back to it often. Here's my homework: Doreen, intensely aware of the huge ma...
by Come forth
Fri Sep 13, 2013 11:45 pm
Forum: Results and Highest Rankings
Topic: Highest Rankings for EXTRA Challenge
Replies: 2
Views: 1757

Re: Highest Rankings for EXTRA Challenge

Congratulations everyone.

Hey Deb, let me take this opportunity to shout out a big thank you for all the work you do here. I know it is often said and everyone on this site appreciates your effort, but I just want to say it again.

Thanks, Graham.
by Come forth
Fri Sep 13, 2013 8:02 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE
Replies: 43
Views: 26810

Re: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE

Congratulations on the big plunge, Amelia. If your desire is to become a better writer then you just took a really good step forward. Just to clarify my thoughts on !. I wasn't suggesting you may rely on them, in fact forget for a moment about us the writers and focus on the readers. It is the reade...
by Come forth
Wed Sep 11, 2013 9:01 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE
Replies: 43
Views: 26810

Re: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE

Love your enthusiasm, but the other side of the coin is that three ? or !, or using them too much simply drains their power and when one is needed it is powerless and taken for granted. An emotion that is shown in the writing, actually coming from the speaker in their words or character development,...

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