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by lookinup
Tue Apr 19, 2016 4:32 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings #2--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 52
Views: 47289

Re: Beginnings #2--the 4th judging criterion

Biting down on the stick he’d shoved into his mouth to keep from hollering, Fred fought the darkness and tried to keep from passing out from the pain in his leg. Barely aware of the eagle that screeched overhead, he looked though half-closed eyes at the pinprick of molten sunlight disappearing behin...
by lookinup
Mon Apr 18, 2016 2:35 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 104
Views: 90878

Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion

Does this work for attention grabbing? If it does, I'll jump to the next lesson.

I held up my hand dripping with blood and froze.
by lookinup
Fri Apr 15, 2016 9:09 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS
Replies: 27
Views: 22739

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS

Appreciated the input.
by lookinup
Fri Apr 15, 2016 4:31 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS
Replies: 27
Views: 22739

Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS

Gasping for breath in the thin air and exhausted from the climb, Charles lay prostrate on the ground. His hands numb from the frigid cold still clung to the branch that had saved his life. Twisting around to look down upon the direction from which he'd just come, Charles' stomach lurched. Fledgling ...
by lookinup
Mon Apr 11, 2016 9:57 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Having a point or message #2--6th judging criterion
Replies: 25
Views: 26714

Re: Having a point or message #2--6th judging criterion

Good food for thought...thank you.
by lookinup
Mon Apr 11, 2016 4:01 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Having a point or message #2--6th judging criterion
Replies: 25
Views: 26714

Re: Having a point or message #2--6th judging criterion

Making a point or having a theme is probably the single most difficult "point" I struggle with. I also like the way ( in either #1 or #2) that you earmark that those trying to write emotionally laden content - especially when adapting personal experience into a piece - often miss this aspect of writ...
by lookinup
Tue Mar 29, 2016 6:28 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--CONFLICT
Replies: 10
Views: 9085

Re: Be a Better Writer--CONFLICT

My favorite childhood story is "The Ugly Duckling" by Hans Christian Anderson. The main conflict seems to be the "duckling's" search for its identity, to resolve the question as to why it is so different from its siblings. Correct?
by lookinup
Tue Mar 29, 2016 6:20 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
Replies: 58
Views: 53488

near-misses

Under the topic of sentence structure: I tend to start my sentences with a clause. I guess it's the way I think. So I write what comes naturally to me, but then I go back and change the sentence structure to start with the action. For example: Trying to find an idea for the challenge always makes m...
by lookinup
Fri Mar 25, 2016 7:27 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
Replies: 58
Views: 53488

Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

I as a FW writer am expanding my awareness and appreciation for what is offered on this site. It's remarkable. At any rate, that double-negative evaded me. I feel both irked and amused when those get past me; they are so obvious yet so obscure.
by lookinup
Fri Mar 25, 2016 7:21 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #1
Replies: 103
Views: 88616

Re: Dialog #1

Again, thanks Bea. Regret its being so long - just read about limiting word count and will watch that in the future.
by lookinup
Fri Mar 25, 2016 7:19 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #2
Replies: 52
Views: 55076

Re: Dialog #2

Thanks! Back to work....
by lookinup
Thu Mar 24, 2016 5:58 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
Replies: 58
Views: 53488

#13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

Foreshadowing - prediction Irony – quirk of fate Surprise - blow Suspense - tension Symbolism - imagery Well, I've been reading some of this thread. Here goes: Telling: Dan’s grim prediction felt like a quirk of fate, levying a further blow to Susan’s self-esteem. The tension building in her explode...
by lookinup
Thu Mar 24, 2016 4:42 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #2
Replies: 52
Views: 55076

Dialog #2

"Diane, you're so mean!" "Ya think?" asked Diane, knocking yet another book off the stack Jill carried. "How's that? Better?" Jill's mouth dropped open, her eyes filling with tears and traveling from the books strewn on the ground to those spilling over in her arms. "Looks like we have a problem her...
by lookinup
Wed Mar 23, 2016 7:20 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #1
Replies: 103
Views: 88616

Re: Dialog #1

No worries and thanks! Enjoy your grands....
by lookinup
Tue Mar 22, 2016 7:20 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #1
Replies: 103
Views: 88616

Re: Dialog #1

"Mom!" Jocelyn whined. "What now?" Tina asked, praying for patience and counting backward from one hundred as she often did when dealing with her fourteen-year-old-going-on-twenty daughter. "Ashley and Tiffany get to go! It's not fair," responded Jocelyn, her eyes flashing with anger and righteous ...

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