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Hi Jan, I was trying to allude to Eve in the garden of Eden with her giving in to the temptation involving the fruit commonly know as an apple. But with a more happy ending in my story. I was afraid that the way I used it might be too obscure. Thanks, Holly Ah! But in your example, the apple convin...

Hi Jan,

I was trying to allude to Eve in the garden of Eden with her giving in to the temptation involving the fruit commonly know as an apple. But with a more happy ending in my story.

I was afraid that the way I used it might be too obscure.

Thanks,
Holly

Hi Jan, Here is an attempt at allusion. Jodi stepped off the scale. Oh no, not another pound. Returning to her desk, she had to pass her co-worker. Edith held out a tin of cookies. "Jodi, Chocolate Chip cookies -- I baked them last night." Jodi picked one up. "The doctor said I need to loose weight,...

Hi Jan, very glad you are doing this again! I don't think I've ever used alliteration. I hadn't really thought about incorporating anything like this into my writing. Can you mix it up and use different letters throughout? Below is my attempt. 1. During our monthly visit to the zoo, we made our way ...

woo hoo! I see it, but I don't believe it! I'm on the list! :shock: Congrats everyone who participated in the writing! Sometimes it seems frustrating, but even though I know I got a lot to learn, its great squeaking up little by little in the list. So today, I can say I am very happy to see my name ...

Hi Jan, How about something like this for the first sentence? As Marilyn peered at the dark, littered alley, the only thing inviting was an "I Love NY" sticker on the side of a nearby dumpster; everything in her screamed "don't do it," but she didn't have time to take the long way. One thing I notic...

Okay, thanks Jan. I can now see why you mentioned that my first try might have been an anecdote. For 1a, the anecdote, can you really put fictional elements in your non-fiction? I could see if you said "take for example this paragraph" and told about it, or if there was some mechanism to let the rea...

Oh shoot! You are right.. I misread it, I have been on a fiction kick lately and I guess that is all I noticed at a quick glance ... the word fiction. But, even so, I did have a friend with a very similar circumstance. Where she lost a job and immediately was blessed with another one. I guess unless...

Hi Jan, Here's my shot at the homework. I hope three very short paragraphs are ok, because really if you squeeze them all into one, they would equal a normal size one. :) Tears rolled down her face as she hung the 'Out of Business' sign on her empty store. Why had her prayers gone unanswered? Arrivi...

wow, thats funny! I was wondering if that was the case, where someone was upset or angry and wrote it from those feelings. Also funny.. after reading that "purposely bad" poem, I now like poetry. Forgive me, but I used to think poetry was all fluff. But when I read that poem and could see some of th...

Hi Jan, I have never tried to write poetry and had never really cared for it. I found this poem on the internet about 6 years ago and with what I was going through at the time; I could really identify with it. Thats what I liked about it. I don't know if it would be considered a "good" poem or not. ...

Thanks Ann!

Until the next lesson . . .

Hello, Here is my elipsis homework. 1. Jeffrey needed to look good. Every detail of his dress, hygiene and hair style had to be perfect. It took him excessive amounts of time in preperation to exit his home. In every way, his appearance to others was excrutiatingly obsessed over. Jeffrey needed to l...

Thanks Jan,

I am going to look for a punctuation book to study.

Thanks for the classes, they really are helpful. I don't have any questions at the moment.

Hope your Florida trip is fun.