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Congrats!

Congrats to everyone!!

I peeked and saw 9th place. Wowzer! That's good to me!

Cajunluvie for Rachel Dorsey

I used to live in Fl for years. Gainesville and Micanopy.

I just moved back to my hometown in Louisiana in June '09.

So.... this could be a South-East group?

Congrats, Mariane!!

Wow!

Congrats to everyone who got EC's. That's awesome!

I was rather shocked to see my poem for the 1st place in Level Champion for Beginners Category. That's neat!

No-No list 1. Someone's house burning accidentally or an arson incident that is being investigated. 2. A car engine catching fire while driving 3. Heating up food or cooking, baking in the kitchen where a fire breaks out 4. Campfire meetings in the woods with the Girl or Boy scouts or at summer camp...

Yes, Cajunluvie--except that your first tow paragraphs are both Cathie's, and could be combined. I went through my previous entries to see if I could find one with a dialogue between a husband and wife that'd be somewhat equivalent to this. Try this silly story and see if that makes more sense. Kee...

Yeah, I see what you're saying. I liked your rewrite of the beginning with Cathie much better than mine. :D Let me rewrite this again to see if I've got this right this time around. She reached across the sofa arm and pulled out a book, The Five Love Languages and waved it in front of his face. "Doe...

Well, I'll give it a try.... Adrian Beecher smiled at his wife of twenty years. Sliding his arm around her shoulders he remarked, "Cathie, have I mentioned how beautiful you are, lately?" He heard her giggle and saw her head shake a little. "Silly you. You just told me that an hour ago. What's all t...

Carol,

I thought that was a cute start!

Thanks, Jan. Yup, that was what I wanted to know.

“Help! I’m soooo lost, and I can’t find ‘said’ anywhere. Please help me.” “Oh my, you are a sad case for lost and found. I did say to try to move the ‘good stuff’ into the dialog. Maybe I should clarify, ‘said’ is rather bland, not really good stuff, so put it back,” said Jan. “No, no, I can’t. I c...

Cajunluvie, this is definitely over 100 words! Have mercy! You've really skipped into next week's lesson on tagless dialog--which is absolutely fine. So the only thing I'll do is to correct in red a few punctuation/capitalization errors. You're an over-achiever! "You kidding me?" Rose scoffed at he...

"You kidding me?" Rose scoffed at her husband, Tim. "She's coming here? Here? Of all places she could have gone, she picks our house?" "Ma wanted to see the kids. So, I told her she could. No harm done." Tim replied. Rose rolled her eyes and turned her face away from him. "Sure, just the kids." she ...