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- Thu Aug 03, 2017 2:55 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--ANACHRONISM
- Replies: 6
- Views: 16757
Re: Be a Better Writer--ANACHRONISM
Hi, Jan. I have a comment... I'm working on a futuristic pre-tribulation story outline with its time frame starting in the year 2036. I'm doing a lot of research to catch up with the speeding of nowadays scientific and technological advancements. However, most of my fictional pre-dystopian world is ...
- Wed Aug 02, 2017 11:45 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be A Better Writer--ALLUSION
- Replies: 32
- Views: 57830
Re: Be A Better Writer--ALLUSION
I love this book. I wish I had the time to read it again, just for the beauty of the style.
I looked down to the deep valley and felt like Heidi, high up in the Swiss Alps.
Thanks.
I looked down to the deep valley and felt like Heidi, high up in the Swiss Alps.
Thanks.
- Wed Aug 02, 2017 11:01 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--ONOMATOPOEIA
- Replies: 8
- Views: 19998
Re: Be a Better Writer--ONOMATOPOEIA
Here I go:
A mighty lion's roar echoed across the jungle.
Woof, woof. The puppy ran towards Michele.
"Woof, woof," the puppy ran towards Michele. (?)
Thanks.
A mighty lion's roar echoed across the jungle.
Woof, woof. The puppy ran towards Michele.
"Woof, woof," the puppy ran towards Michele. (?)
Thanks.
- Wed Aug 02, 2017 3:29 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION
- Replies: 32
- Views: 55359
Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION
Hi, Jan. I don't write poems, but I've wrote this one just to do not fail at the Challenge--Beat Around The Bush. I fixed it a little to bring it here :roll:. I do have some Alliteration in it to contribute to the class. Deadline The whistling winds shivering at the windows, like faraway waves knead...
- Wed Aug 02, 2017 2:24 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--THE FINAL JUDGING CRITERION
- Replies: 8
- Views: 18358
Re: Be a Better Writer--THE FINAL JUDGING CRITERION
I'll write it again, Jan:
A piece has publishing potential if people will want to read it. After all, isn't it what really matters?
Blessings.
A piece has publishing potential if people will want to read it. After all, isn't it what really matters?
Blessings.
- Tue Aug 01, 2017 4:32 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Master Class--SETTING
- Replies: 26
- Views: 53072
Re: Jan's Master Class--SETTING
Oh, Jan, what an important remark you've just made! Elegant! Dr. Philip Dodd strode through the stormy and dark night, and crossed the snowy parking lot towards the Market's main entrance. When he was about to reach the door, an old homeless man approached him. The old man wore a ragged, dirty cloak...
- Tue Aug 01, 2017 1:50 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Master Class--SETTING
- Replies: 26
- Views: 53072
Re: Jan's Master Class--SETTING
Hi, Jan, here is my shot: 3- a homeless man 5- a doctor 2- the mall or market 4- one dark and stormy night 5- a shoe It was a dark and stormy night. Dr. Philip Dodd strode across the snowy parking lot towards the Market's main entrance. When he was about to reach the door, an old homeless man approa...
- Mon Jul 31, 2017 11:31 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SENTENCE STRUCTURES (THE END)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 37457
Re: Be a Better Writer--SENTENCE STRUCTURES (THE END)
The link you've provided will suit me well, Jan, since I'm not planning to go for more than I need, and distract myself with anything but the Art of Writing, which seems to be the one you're also enthralled with, and it brings me to the realization that I'm much obliged to say that you've helped me ...
- Mon Jul 31, 2017 4:20 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SENTENCE STRUCTURES (THE END)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 37457
Re: Be a Better Writer--SENTENCE STRUCTURES (THE END)
Wow! Jan, look what I found in my article Receive : Total Sentences: 49 Simple Sentence: 31 (!) Compound Sentence: 7 Complex Sentence: 9 Compound-Complex Sentence: 2 (!) The most interesting thing: Out of the 31 simple sentences, 19 were simple sentences with compound verbs. Ex.: She stopped, looked...
- Sun Jul 30, 2017 1:49 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES
- Replies: 40
- Views: 66143
Re: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES
Hi, Jan, here's my chosen simple sentence (in italics): He stretched his arm and tapped her front. "Receive, receive," he shouted. Belauca threw herself backward and left it go... There was no one to catch her... This article, Receive, has fifty sentences, only sixteen are simple sentences...
- Sat Jul 29, 2017 10:25 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
- Replies: 102
- Views: 265964
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Here's my correction, Jan:
She panicked... lost her breath, and choked.
The man gaped at her--and with a soft voice--said, "Are you alright Ma'am? Do you wanna hold my hand?
Thank you so much for this lesson. God bless you.
(no need to reply)
She panicked... lost her breath, and choked.
The man gaped at her--and with a soft voice--said, "Are you alright Ma'am? Do you wanna hold my hand?
Thank you so much for this lesson. God bless you.
(no need to reply)
- Sat Jul 29, 2017 2:44 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
- Replies: 102
- Views: 265964
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Correcting: The discussion over your article, Sacrament, is in the Sentence Structures (The End) class that I'm studying now.
- Sat Jul 29, 2017 2:33 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
- Replies: 102
- Views: 265964
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Jan, I just loved this daring lesson! Here's my second try: Doreen didn't stop reading her book while the subway clacked through the stations. She shouldered the window and moved her thigh away from the big and blue-jeaned man sitting at her side. This man is too close to me... Before Doreen's stopp...
- Fri Jul 28, 2017 11:27 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
- Replies: 102
- Views: 265964
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Hi, Jan! After some shortcuts, I'm back :D Here is my attempt on this one. I tightened it to 76 words, but I'm not sure if it worked: Doreen stuck to her book while the train clacked through the stations. She shouldered the window and moved her thigh from the big man sitting at her side. This man is...
- Fri Jul 07, 2017 2:21 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be A Better Writer--THE MAGIC ENDING
- Replies: 57
- Views: 88940
Re: Be A Better Writer--THE MAGIC ENDING
Jan, I loved how you worked out the ending of your original story. You did provided a
new "baby" to Maggie, and great solace to her mom. I didn't expect that. Ingenious!
Thanks for this lesson.
new "baby" to Maggie, and great solace to her mom. I didn't expect that. Ingenious!
Thanks for this lesson.