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Topic: Day and Night (07/10/14)
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TITLE: Makeover | Previous Challenge Entry
By Francy Judge
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My eyes scan the sky to see its source.
Another one graces my eyelashes,
Blurring my vision for a moment.
I pedal faster.
To the west, a ginger sun
Nestles in the clouds, calm, unaware
Of what churns in the east;
Electricity crackles, white veins
Zig-zag through grey clouds,
Trimmed with violet edges,
Striking the ground somewhere
Not too far away.
I pedal faster
To beat the impending storm,
Remembering mom’s warning,
“Look at the sky…you shouldn’t go.”
“I’m fifteen…just a twenty minute ride…
And I’ll be back.”
But I’m not fast enough
When the sky opens
To sheets of rain.
A horn blares, too late;
Screeching, burning, scraping, slicing;
Metal wraps around me.
Pain inside-out, count to ten,
Hold my breath,
Pray.
Faces hover:
“Who is she?”
“…a name?”
A cool breeze brushes my skin
That doesn’t shiver;
I want to pedal away.
Sirens in the distance
Sing louder, louder
As loud as nothing;
Clouds spin,
A kiss of breath,
Fists beat my chest,
Until time stops.
As the rain ends,
Tears slip away.
The hum of voices hushes;
The world winds down to stillness;
Piercing pain dissipates into feathers
That float upward;
Night turns to day.
Gentle hands lead me
To light,
Remove my filthy clothes
In layers,
And wash me.
I know I am ready
To meet my Savior.
Silence trickles into song
As a choir of angels
Guide me into eternity;
I am made whole.
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“Therefore, if anyone is in Christ, he is a new creation; the old has gone, the new has come!”
2 Corinthians 5:17
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You also did an excellent job of making me feel both pain and joy. Of course I couldn't help, as a parent, to still feel pain for the parent mentioned in this story, even as your 15 year old mc was being delivered home.
You did a great job of writing a very impactful piece.
I agree with the earlier comment that if your poetry reads as a story that carries you along, it is very well written. This free verse did that for me.
Blessings.
A young girls frivolous rebellion resulting in irreversible consequences, but tempered with a grand ending.
Nicly done!
Well done.
God bless~