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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: The Short End of the Stick (02/20/14)
Here’s a piece of free advice
Best leave my door alone
Jesus, there is none within
That You can make Your own

The deal You make, no bag of gold
But blood poured out for me
Truth to say, You profit not
Redeeming one like me

‘Tis something great to think that You
Can mend each broken soul
But I’m a man so cracked and crushed
I cannot be made whole

The world that I inhabit is
A cruel and savage place
The pain inflicted on my heart
Draws lines upon my face

I see no gifts or talents that
Are useful to Your cause
I cannot build Your kingdom
This man composed of flaws

I think You cannot save me
So deeply stained with sin
My words and deeds are worthless
With a fallen world to win

And yet You keep on knocking
Insist I heed Your call
That I can never measure up
It matters not at all

The world was not yet spoken
Into being by Your word
But my name throughout the heavens
Upon Your lips was heard

The God of Restoration has
His plan to make things whole
To claim and cleanse His errant child
And love him heart and soul

And in the loving He will change
This man, make him anew
His image in this rescued life
Will shine so clearly through




“Here I am! I stand at the door and knock. If anyone hears my voice and opens the door, I will come in and eat with that person, and they with me.” Revelation 3:20
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Toni Hammer
02/28/14
Beautiful poem. Great rhyme and meter. I sound like a complete hypocrite saying this, but I wonder if more punctuation could have been used. I wrote a poem last week and didn't do much punctuation and wish I had... so I guess I'm retroactively trying to make up for it in yours.

My craziness aside, though, this was wonderful. I loved the verse reference at the end.
Allen Povenmire
02/28/14
Poetry isn't my long suit, by any means, but I this had an rhythm and flow that keep me engaged throughout. Nice message. Thanks.
Margaret Kearley
03/01/14
Oh what a lovely reminder of the love of God - just beautiful. The last two verses particularly are a precious truth and a prayer from the heart. Thankyou
Noel Mitaxa 
03/01/14
It's funny how we try to advise God - and find that he knew best all along, and you've drawn our attention to the love that powers hsi persistence. Well done.
Hannah R
03/01/14
Had a heavenly feel to it, great theme.
C D Swanson 
03/03/14
Loved your poem! Rev 3:20 is one of "several" verses that I love.

God bless~
Dusty Fontaine
03/04/14
This is a well written poem. The ABCB rhyming pattern works well to tell the story.

The rhythm and flow of the poem was perfect except for the eighth verse which seemed a bit off. I think the third line of that verse had too many syllables.

But that is so minor. The story you told in rhyme is a beautiful one, and one we all should experience.

I'm assuming that you're saying that God is getting the short end of the stick.
Bea Edwards 
03/06/14
Loved your poem, right from the title-because we never are beyond rescue-to the happy ending of God 'claiming and cleansing His errant child' just superb!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/07/14
Congratulations on ranking 20 overall!