The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow! I like this little twist here! I was guessing that it was her in the picture with the glasses and wondered how it would tie in with Alex. The opening with all the little descriptions were good though. Good job! ^_^
The first two lines pulled me right in.. loved it! There was a word wrong in the third sentence that kinda threw me off and had to reread it to get it.. but once I got past that.. thoroughly enjoyed it!
I kind of suspected the ending and was delighted to have it confirmed at the end. This is a very well written story.
06/04/08
Superb! I loved every moment of this gentle story.
I loved the story, and I suspected the ending too. Did I understand correctly that it was Alex speaking to her in the art gallery? How is it that he didn't recognize her even in the slightest? Just a question that niggled at my mind when I finished the story. Good work. Many blessings, Cheri
06/04/08
Wow, this is so good. How did you write this so well in so few words? The marks of a great writer. Well done!
I want more!
More of the day in the picture.
More of the day in Coventry.
Will she tell him who she is? I want more......Hope this places.
So much clever writing this week, and this piece is no exception. You packed a lot of descriptive information into this. it was a pleasure to read.