The Official Writing Challenge
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05/18/07
I liked your title and felt it fit well with your piece! However, I did NOT like Major Minor and think he needs to be replaced immediately!! :) Very interesting story but the ending was a bit of a "downer." It had a good message about ministry abuse!
05/18/07
Major Minor needs to work the popcorn machine!! A fun package for the lesson--I just wish it had a happy ending. (but then again, life doesn't always have happy endings, does it?!)
Entertaining read. This is my favorite line, "Gazing at the sky and the seven moons of Seldon, he wondered at the hopelessness of it all: a ministry that had been reaching many, with rottenness at its core."
Unfortunately, I think that fits some ministries around today. Well done.
This is great. Wonderful storyline, the ending packed quite a punch. Very well done.