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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Exotic (08/08/13)

TITLE: Far Away Dreams
By Yvonne Blake
08/13/13


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I stare at the image, a brown-skinned boy,
Who drops his net in waters of blue.
Does he sometimes dream to live like me,
And have adventures that other boys do?

We are alike – both he and me,
But I have freckles, and his skin is dark.
I have to wear mittens, coat, and hat;
His skin’s almost bare; he’s free as a lark.

I think that he would rather play
Than spend his days fishing for food
Or follow the bleating goats about
Or collect wild fruit or gather wood.

I expect he never has homework to do
Or tend to the dog or rake the leaves
Or shovel the steps or take out the trash
Or remember to say ‘thank you” and “please.”

We are alike – both he and me.
He’s probably told to eat snails and snake.
I’d rather taste those than oatmeal and peas,
And I think he might like pizza and steak.

When he looks up through the swaying palms,
Does he dream of lands of snowy white?
Does he imagine the stars to be icy flakes
Or the wind is a howling wolf at night?

If I lived there in that tropical land,
I would sail upon the ocean wild
And search for ships with a black spyglass
And discover treasure on a sandy isle.

We are alike – both he and me.
What seems odd and strange to the other
Becomes an exotic thing to see
And so we dream on – as strangers, as brothers.


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Linda Goergen08/15/13
What is exotic certainly is a matter of perspective and you show that so well in this delightful, image filled poem. I laughed at the line about the MC preferring to try snail and snake, rather than oatmeal or peas…so like the thinking a little boy might have! Perfect title because I could just picture the little boy sitting there day-dreaming as I read this. Well done!
Laura Hawbaker 08/19/13
I liked the use of the repeating phrase. Also liked the ending line, "And so we dream on--as strangers, as brothers. Good job!
CD (Camille) Swanson 08/20/13
Awww. I really enjoyed this.

God bless~
Carolyn Ancell08/20/13
There is so much real joy and playfulness in this, as well as its message. A pleasure to read. Enjoyed every word.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/22/13
Congratulations on ranking 20 overall!