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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Click (04/18/13)

TITLE: With one click
By Ellen Carr
04/25/13


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Darkening clouds are gathering,
a cold wind whistles around.
My plans to go meandering
come crashing to the ground.

Things have conspired to defeat me,
Iím thwarted and turned from my way.
I wanted to follow my schedule,
my calendar notes for the day.

I long to just click my fingers,
to set everything to my course,
to be in control of what happens,
my great expectations enforce.

If I could decide every outcome
so life went the way that I chose,
things would be shiny and rosy.
Thatís surely the way that it goes.

With a click of my fingers the weather
would turn into sunshine or rain,
I could make every outcome a good one,
eliminate sorrow and pain.

Never Iíd face disappointment,
or failure, regret or remorse.
No storms on my lake of reflection,
never adjustment mid-course.

But the power isnít mine for the taking.
I am born to belong to the King,
to be shaken and stirred and unsettled,
until to His feet I will bring Ö

my soul and my body and spirit,
surrendering to His command,
accepting His rule and His choices,
the days of my life He has planned.

With one click of His fingers He formed me.
For His joy He allows me to be.
He made and sustains all creation.
He controls how it impacts on me.

If I fall on my knees and I worship,
If I trust His infallible grace,
Iíll be guided and led though lifeís changes,
Iíll be readied to see His dear face.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/25/13
This is quite lovely. O like how you take the reader from the dark into hope and the light, Nice job of writing on topic too.
lynn gipson 04/28/13
I love this! "With one click His fingers formed me" is a line that will stay with me. Absolutely beautiful poem I will read again. Thank you for sharing your fine talent and words.
Christina Banks 04/28/13
This poem resonated with me in a very deep way. There is something in my life that I wish I could just click my fingers and have it solved, but that isn't the way life works. Thank you for this beautiful reminder that God is forming us, and He is in control.
Judith Gayle Smith04/28/13
You render reality exquisitely . . .
Cinda Carter04/29/13
The poem is beautiful and it drew me in while reading and formed an image in my mind of what it would like to be the one in control of my own life but you left us with the perfect answer that God is in control of our lives and His way is the perfect way for us in every sense of the word.
Cheryl Harrison 04/29/13
I enjoyed your poem. Great message within. It would be wonderful if we could snap our fingers and cause all our problems to vanish. Matter of fact, there are a few that I would like to "vanish" right now. But the Lord is much wiser than I and He tends to use those "problems" to shape me.

Thankfully, all of our problems are temporary, and some day, in the twinkling of an eye... the problems will vanish and all we will see is Him!

Thanks for writing this. Blessings.
Alicia Renkema04/29/13
I loved the whole idea here of the fact that it has to be the Lord who is doing the planning. I particularly liked the last 4 stanza's. In the second to the last one though, I would use the word they instead of it, I think it flows better when it is read aloud. That is just my personal opinion as a poet. Yet I know how particularly subjective poetry can be so take that with a grain of salt. This fit the topic beautifully. My favorite stanza that you wrote (can't remember which one) reminded me of Psalm 100 in the KJV where it says, ..."It is God who made us, and not we ourselves..." Blessings to you.
Alicia Renkema04/29/13
I re-read and if the it were changed to they then "impacts" would also need to be changed to impact.
Lisa Johnson 04/29/13
creation is the "it" that "impacts"...you are gramatically correct...
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem from start to finish.
Loren T. Lowery05/01/13
God is in control - what a wonderful message that brings great peace. I really enjoyed the flow of this poem and its soothing message - the words matching the theme seamlessly.
Bea Edwards 05/01/13
Simply lovely!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/02/13
Congratulations for ranking 25 overall!