The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow you did a great job of building a great story in so few words. It seems like a perfect introduction to a novel. I want to keep reading and know more about this thrilling story.
Great descriptions - they are not pretty, although they are ones we should not forget.
This is like one of those stories you just can't put down. I had to keep reading to find out what would happen next. It's interesting how those words "They promised" turn out to be so empty. Great take on the topic.